Thursday 11 July 2013
Wednesday 10 July 2013
Writing Samples
Every Picture tells a story.
Use your imagination and experience to narrate (tell) a story about the photo.
Where are the people going? Why?
What problem is caused? How is it solved?
Think about:
- where your story is set
- who your character are - what they do, what they say, and how they think and feel
- the problem and how it is solved
- the order of your ideas and how they are linked.
Remember to:
- choose your words carefully
- take care with your spelling, punctuation, and sentences
- edit - add or delete words or sentences to improve your work.
One foggy afternoon me and my two best friends, Lesieli and Ngatokurua went to a the nearest river in town to have nice and calming swim, then suddenly we saw a young lady. She was wearing a navy coloured sailing suit and hat with straight blond hair and we walked up to him and he grab us by a fright and took us in his sailing boat that runs on rails it was a odd sight to see and then I saw Ngatokurua setting next to the sail his name was sailer Dannis she said that it was her sister and that she want to take us on the never ending train track and we were all scared besides from Ngatokurua she was happy that her sister was there by her side.
A few hours later Lesieli got a big shot, me and Ngatokurua were playing hand games while Dennis was steering the wheel of the boat and then Dennis told us to close your eyes and imagine that we were somewhere happy and I imagine being in a world of milk and cookies with soft marshmallows we were sailing across the worm chocolate milk and there were chocolate fishes and a volcano that exploded with Bright orange ice-cream and there would be different coloured animals that would have jelly beans inside them.
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I wake up and I have drill down the side of my shirt that I was wearing then we came to a stop it it was the starting line of this adventure we jumped out and we rans as fast as we could back home with scratches on our knees and saw your parents on the table having tea with a smile.
Tuesday 9 July 2013
Food scraps-Compost
This new post I am posting is about rubbish in our school,when we have rubbish in our school it effects not just us but the environment and our community.When rubbish is in our school it makes us sick because of all of the bacteria spreading from the rubbish and effecting the air! and its all about how we solve the problem of rubbish.
My First Writing Sample In 2012
My family and I just move into the capital of sydney by my grandmother Rosanna she was my idol. She made the best cakes and help people that she didn’t even know but the best thing is that she’s my grandma she always helps me with my homework when I need help with it. But one day when I wake up for school she wasn’t in her bed or making cookies like she promised and I thought that something happen to her like she got tooken from me I yelled to my oldest cousin and she raced in what happen she said in a fright “no” she’s gone to work you always do this and you know that you can talk to me. go get ready she said we're going into town because I need some more clothes. When we got into town we saw the street light twitch and the ground move it startled me, hey did you see that. When we got into the store I saw the Wind. When the moon was going, now the moon was getting bigger and bigger as seconds went by knowing that there was going to be a big storm tomorrow at 12:00. All of the city got all of the overnight gear ready for that bigger afternoon.
I know that me and my family is going to get into your car and drive off somewhere where we are going to be safe it was me and my three brothers. It was two hours before this big disaster is going to happen even know that we were getting out of town we really felt sorry for the people who did like my best friend frances she was only 12 years old. When we got onto the plane we flew up into the air and saw all of Australia all into dirt.
Description Writing.
WALT - plan a piece of Descriptive writing using our 5 senses:
See: What is this boy looking at? Who or what is looking at him? What can you see?
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Hear: What might this boy be able to hear?
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Smell: What might this boy be able to smell? What does the tree smell like? What does the air smell like? What does the boy smell like?
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Taste: What might this boy be able to taste?
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Feel: What does the tree feel like underneath his fingertips? How does the ground feel underneath his feet? What does the air feel like? How is he feeling on the inside?
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WALT - craft a piece of descriptive writing using our plans.
Begin crafting your description here:
All I could hear was the birds sing songs behind me, the children laughter was like they were getting chased by a one headed man. But hearing all of the laughter made me feel more lonely because i thought that they were chasing me but they just wanted me to hid so they could run away
The sun was beaming as the clouds were fading away, I couldn't stop glancing at the bunch of different coloured butterflies flapping their wings. All I could see was the frozen on the rough bark on the tree against my wrinkly face, seeing all of the children getting big eyes trying to find me, Then suddenly I saw them running away and say “lets ditch him”
I could taste the trouble lunch overpowering my mouth with i was ready to spew holding it trying not blab and just want to cry but my little sisters come by and find me crying, she gave me a big hug and comfort me will i wiped my tears away, me and my sister were holding hands engaging to get a rugby ball and seeing all of the parents with their husbands with big smiles and seeing their children.
Monday 8 July 2013
Blog Commenting
My interesting bog commenting I went all around the school and the cluster and commented on children's blog's I didn't write that much but hope you enjoy.
Synonyms
This is MY resent Blog post hope you enjoy. its about what kinds of different synonyms there are.
Friday 5 July 2013
Current Events
This is my new post called My current events and its about When The Stars Turned Green.
Thursday 4 July 2013
Writing Sample Test.
It was the strangest thing I’ve have ever seen.....
With no worry I walked down the street with my two best friends Ngatookz and Caprice rocking with our leather chuck taylors Blue,Red and Yellow, walking past a bunch of bushy plants and flowers, but when we tried to walk together we saw something move in these mysterious bushies we didn‘t know what they were flipping our hair out of the way and coming it back to see, with in second this thing was gone know where to be see but it just flow out of our minds after that hour, so we just kept walking with our swag and good looks, when we were heading back into the street next to the one where the accented happened,we worried a bit because we thought is something going to go wrong or is something is going to happen to one of us,
Thinking curiously but didn’t want to think horrible we didn’t want to enter this situation again so we just turned the corner, heading back Ngatookz house because that was the nearest house,
“Can we run but not mess up our hair” Ngatookz thought,
“and make sure we don’t get mud on my new pairs of shoes I mean Our” yelled Caprice,
“hahaha sure we can but not too fast because I run out of breathe fast when I run you guys know that” Ngatookz buffed,
So we run not to fast and not slow turning the edge of that street it looked darker than before and suddenly I tripped up on this rock well it looked like a rock or a Snell and I had just enter that part of the darkness and It was the Strangest thing I've ever seen so I closed my eyes to see if this part of my life was just a dream and it was, right beside my two best friends Ngatookz and Caprice.
Even knowing that it was a dream I looked outside the window and I saw that street it was 8:00 o'clock in the morning it looked pitch black and something made me remember that this place reminded me of a place we had seen not so long ago but made me remember what kind of place this is with the bushy plants and the colourful flowers hiding away, even know I wanted to freak and try and escape I couldn't because there was no door and just one window that had be covered with jail bars so I just sat back on the bed and fell back to sleep into a deep sleep. In a few hours I woke up and acted liked nothing had happened.
Wednesday 3 July 2013
Tuesday 2 July 2013
Speech Marks
Speech Marks
Write the speech marks into this story
The English Lesson
It was Tuesday morning and I’d just walked down the stairs. “Have you done your homework?” asked my Nan? “Oh no, “I forgot!” I said.
I felt worried because I knew that my teacher, Mrs Williams, wasn’t going to be very happy with me and might shout. When I arrived at school I went to first lesson. “What’s wrong with you Tyler?” my friend asked.”I forgot to do my homework last night and Mrs Williams is going to be cross,” I said
After break I walked into my English classroom. Mrs Williams was waiting. “What’s the matter Tyler”? You look upset.” she said. “I’m very sorry Miss,” I said “But I haven’t done my homework.” “Why Tyler?” she asked. “I don’t know Miss, I just forgot,” “Well at least you’re honest Tyler and not telling lies!” Mrs Williams said. “If you finish it by tomorrow you won’t have a detention.” I felt much better!! “Why did I worry in the beginning?”
Speech Mark.
Punctuate the following story correctly.
WALT use place punctuation correctly in a sentence.
WALT structure dialogue correctly by using speech marks and other punctuation that is appropriate for the purpose of the dialogue.
“What’s that?” Gasped Raj.
“What?” Asked Sara following his finger pointing.
“I can’t see anything!” Her eyes were not yet used to the darkness.
“That look! There’s something moving by the greenhouse.” Hissed Raj. Something glided silently past the panes of glass which shone in the moonlight.
“Yes! I can see it now.” Whispered Sara.”
“It’s fox Raj.” Whispered Sarah.
“ No I don’t think so! It’s too tall. It’s more like a small person, perhaps a child.” Raj looked towards the greenhouse. He breathed.
“There it is again! Did you see it Sara?” Sara could not believe her eyes.
“I saw it and I could see through it she said.” Raj nodded his head
“A ghost!” They both whispered.
// = new line
“ ” = speech marks
. = full stop
, = comma
? = question mark
! = exclamation mark
Monday 1 July 2013
Ancestral Poem
I am a Maori Godess,
My culture is the centre of my knowledge that I know the most of.
I am a strong, independent young wahine because of the strength, beauty, fierceness and warm heart that was passed down to me by my
beautiful ancestors who protect me, they care for me and have helped me to be successful.
Even though their tombstones represent their passing I still feel as if they are still alive in me.
You all are with me, guiding and protecting me to reach my hopes and dreams.
The work of my ancestors, their struggles and their accomplishments illustrate my identity and who I am today - an intelligent Maori queen.
If I could see my ancestors I would thank them for giving me their strength and mana.
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